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Topic Started: 7th August 2010 - 01:15 AM (1,172 Views)
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:goku: I read your latest update. Tis a shame we can't write lemons. But those are the rules, so it can't be helped.

I should've known that Vegeta's double was taking Bulma out there for that. XD I've read enough Vegeta fics by now that I should know better. I bet he's only doing that with Bulma to keep her happy and quiet.
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hm well there's a little more to it than that, but yeah, mostly he's just trying to stay in character. its also because this guy's animalistic side overpowers him most of the time and he has trouble controlling it. if i didnt have to cut the lemon out that might have been a bit more obvious, but you can read it on FF.net. or i can pm it :P

in reference to the earlier review, i was planning for trunks to get into some more trouble but i havent thought up exactly what he'll get up to yet. trying to come up with ideas :gir2:
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Sorry for not reviewing in so long. You know certain events in my life have kept me from reading much fanfiction lately, but I still read this when I have time. Ha, they couldn't keep me away from this if they tried. I love it too much to abandon it. ^_^

Anyway, I'm really interested in the idea of cloning Saiyans and such in the last post. What a fascinating idea! Now I think I understand why there are two Vegeta's. But if they want to clone the Saiyans, maybe they'll make too many and get killed by them if their plan backfires.

Oh, so many possibilities! Where might something like that take them? I'm still looking forward to updates, even though I don't review as often as I used to. So don't stop now, peggs. One way or another, I'll still find time to R&R. ^_^
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i'm glad you're still enjoying my fic ruby ^_^ you reminded me that i need to update! i've also had a bit of family trouble recently, so haven't had as much time to write lately

its a very curious situation with these clones. you'll find out what's going on with them and the vegeta double eventually :D it's fun writing bout scientific races, they can make so many amazing things
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I hope everything is okay, peggs. I didn't know you were having problems too. :unsure:

I like this recent update. My goodness, they're treating Vegeta like a lab monkey. Poor thing. And yet it's rather interesting. ;) Note to self:read the uncensored version of this on FFN one day. 8-D
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yeh, things are pretty shit at the moment and uni is very stressful so its hard to get time to do things i like these days... depressing. thanks for always reveiwing and being interested in my story it cheers me up lot :)
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Yeah, things are still shitty for me too right now. But they're sort of trying to get better. When things settle I can update my fics more regularly. And you know, if you ever need to talk about anything, you can always PM me. I'm not posting much but I'm still around.

Anyway, time for my review. ^_^

Once again I see that you're building the suspense here. I can't help but wonder what's going to happen to Trunks and Goten. It sure seems mysterious. It almost sounds like Vegeta's trying to reach out and tell them that something's wrong.

And I laughed at the part where Trunks said, "What is this? Scooby fucking Doo?" That was great! :) :goku:
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Whoa, Vegeta's double is really starting to creep me out. And he's acting really weird. o.0

Does that double only last so long before it starts to go haywire or something? There seems to be a problem with it. Either way, if that keeps up, everyone will know that isn't the real Vegeta very soon.
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yes well, the issue wth the double is complicated. it's not malfunctioning as such, its just having more and more trouble hiding its true identity.
i should go update again. its getting close to the part where its explained now

hehe, i enjoyed writing the scooby doo part. trunks is such a shit isn't he :P especially compared to mirai trunks!
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Wow, this last update was really something! o.0 I guess that duplicate can't hide its true nature...especially not when its out killing the neighbor! That thing must be made up of all the evil that is inside of Vegeta, and that's a seriously scary thought.

I feel sorry for Goten. No one is listening to him, not even Bulma.

It seems like Bulma doesn't care that Vegeta isn't the same, so long as he does more for her and her family.
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nah, the double can only keep up it's farce for so long, and he isn't even tht great at it.
you're pretty much right about bulma. even though she kind of accepted vegeta how he was in the show, i always thought that she'd prefer it if he started doing things more the way she wanted, like in one of those dodgy romance movies she loves. she was just too busy working with capsule corp to care. in a way i don't think she is the kind of person who has close relationships, she just has to have a man around for when she feels like it lol.
i don't know if any of that makes sense...
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Sorry about the late review. My beta reading work keeps my very busy at times.

First off, I really enjoyed the scene with Jeice and Vegeta. I have got to read the unedited version of this on ff.net someday, because I can tell that I'm missing out on some really good action.

I'm glad to finally see what Vegeta's double truly is, and it's such a fascinating idea.

With my life and the things I've experienced, I understand why Vegeta would have to create another version of himself in his mind, just to survive the pain of his existence, and to make existing even possible. I know what that's like...

This is a brilliant story and I look forward to reading more. I know my reviews are slow and far behind, but I'm still reading. ^_^
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thankyou for the review ruby:)
its always good to hear that people find the ideas in my story fascinating and can even relate to some of the concepts in some instances. even in a fictional story, it helps to have a touch of realism.
and don't worry, i've been very busy too!
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