| review's for 'Thunderstorm'; please review :) | |
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| Tweet Topic Started: 24th December 2010 - 02:09 PM (245 Views) | |
| rosefairy0 | 24th December 2010 - 02:09 PM Post #1 |
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Say anything you like, you loved it, you hated it, you thought it was okay, but if you say you hated it please give a reason why, so that I can make my next story lovable. But at least just say 'something'. Okay, you can review now, hurry up! alright, alright, take your time. Vegeta: I do not approve of this story, it make me look weak. Rose: you know your hard on the outside but a cuddly little bunny on this inside! :lol: *Hug's a stuffed bunny* Vegeta: <_< I really hate you. I hope you know that. Rose: *Throws bunny* okay. Vegeta: Everyone say that this story sucks!! Goku: Awwww, I thought it was cute. Vegeta: You would. <_< |
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| Anti | 24th December 2010 - 03:25 PM Post #2 |
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I got nuffin'.
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'Something'.
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| Kakarot Son | 25th December 2010 - 01:06 AM Post #3 |
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Random DBZ Fan
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Haha, Rose, Thunderstorm was good, as I've already told you, your writing style has advanced a lot thanks to ASPIK. |
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| Ruby | 25th December 2010 - 02:51 AM Post #4 |
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Stuck in the 80s
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Well, it is a cute story, and it is rather nice, but I think Vegeta was just a bit too OOC. I hope you don't mind me saying this, but I just couldn't see him acting that way to his daughter. Still it is a nice short little fic. |
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| rosefairy0 | 25th December 2010 - 11:14 AM Post #5 |
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DARN! I knew I did Vegeta wrong!! At least I didn't make him all lovey dovey gushyness love like some people do. I think I did okay with Vegeta, thanks for pointing that out Ruby I'll be sure to do Vegeta's personality right next time!
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I'll be sure to do Vegeta's personality right next time!
12:41 AM Jul 11