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| mr.nurbs | Mar 11 2006, 11:46 PM Post #1226 |
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Nice work Comlock... What the hell are they smuggling? |
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| Master Rade | Mar 12 2006, 12:32 AM Post #1227 |
The Sexy Latino Supremeo
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Looking nice there comlock. Thats some back pack they have, you should have added a eye glass and a feather for the last dude to make him look cool and both smart. Other then that its looking good for just a concept sketch um hem... *cough* blah blah I have a little something if its all right to ask for some criting. [size=14] Waking up bed scene[/size] |
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| Monsieur Rat | Mar 12 2006, 01:07 AM Post #1228 |
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Lookinjg sechsay Comlock. I was actually reallyt hinking opf joining in on that too, but my ideas were a little different. A little more... out of the box... if you will. You can read their full description over at animationforum |
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| Comlock | Mar 12 2006, 03:44 AM Post #1229 |
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Thanx=) I added some feathers and and eyeglass on the dude aswell^^ Here are some colouring tests: 
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| medved | Mar 12 2006, 04:24 AM Post #1230 |
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awesome as always comlock. Nice otters you got there mal. i like the tail bitten of one for the side view and i like the face of the one left of the jetpack one. Keep up the good work you two! 
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| Anghenfil | Mar 12 2006, 05:07 AM Post #1231 |
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Love the colors and initial concept drawings... and not loving the composition. All the detail is crammed into the bottom half of the picture, and the backpacks/grass are more or less at the same height, so I don't know where my eye should be going. It feels unbalanced in some places and rather boring in others. I hate to be the note of dissent because I love your work, but I think you should scrap the composition and start over. It's just not working for me.  Maybe you could have them actively arguing over the map? I imagine that could be a really funny scenario. |
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| Comlock | Mar 12 2006, 05:43 AM Post #1232 |
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Thanx alot for the crits Ang! I painted some clouds to balance the composition, adjusted the sky colour, I made the grasstraws on the right higher to balance the comp more. Did some changes with the siluettes, and tried to make it look like theire arguing over the map. Great idea Ri!  comments\crits? |
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| Anghenfil | Mar 12 2006, 05:53 AM Post #1233 |
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TONS better!
 I love the extra mountain you added to the background; it really adds to the depth.Hmm... what else? The girl's backpack looks cramped (it looks like you were fighting to keep the silhouette seperate from the ant's pack), so you might want to fix that or really go for a top-heavy shape. The fishing pole is a nice touch. I'm having an urge to lift the root ever-so-slightly too, just so I can see a little of the background in the 'loop' part. And last, the front-most ant looks like it's not walking on the correct part of the root; it's walking in the shadow which is the part that's supposed to be wrapping underneath, so it's undermining the sense of form. That's what I see for now... You've got a nice "swoop" in the picture now, but keep on looking for more lines of action to pull the eye through the pic. |
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| humbleego | Mar 12 2006, 06:05 AM Post #1234 |
Adam's Illegitimate Son
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I agree with Ang. But, I think if the painting is about a jouney, you might consider showing more of the path with a horizontally extended frame. Also, you've got a very small closed comp with the 2 main figures, not suggesting leaving or progression. I'm gonna do a quick sketch. BRB. Damn it, forgot to post.... 
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| Comlock | Mar 12 2006, 06:11 AM Post #1235 |
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Damn you humbleegoo!. Now I gotta start all over again
:lol: Love that composistion! But you missed the ants=( I thought it was a funny little touch. Oh well, I'll see what I can do. Maby Ill start something completly different aswell. Afterall, I just started the competition today. I'll use that horizontally extended frame thank you very much awesome Dave! (why don't you join) |
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| humbleego | Mar 12 2006, 06:20 AM Post #1236 |
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The ants are there, but only suggested at, in the middle. Were they intended to be real ants? Is in small? I thought they were only a little smaller than your humans.
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| Comlock | Mar 12 2006, 06:25 AM Post #1237 |
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=)yes, they were suposed to be the same size as real ants. I guess myperspective atempt didnt work out on my composition. EDIT I did a little quick sulotion. I dont know if this was a good idea. I thought it might be cool to have the log stick out of the frame like that (and have ants walking on it. I must have the ants!^^) 
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| humbleego | Mar 12 2006, 07:28 AM Post #1238 |
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I dig it. I think seeing the bark on the log will help sell their size. |
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| Mutey | Mar 12 2006, 08:06 AM Post #1239 |
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Member! Boo-yarr!
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I'm a complete begginer flash user.
 I have been working on a windmill, i've just learnt how to mask which i'm quite chuffed about. (Thanks to Ranoka) EDIT: Windmill (I've fixed the shadow now so it's in time with the blades.) I know that shadow timing is wrong because it kind of moves backwards, that's the next thing i'm going to work on. [size=1](Not anymore!)[/size] Hopefully i'll finish it, one of my ideas is that the windmill should have plants and vines growing around it and stuff when i'm done. Hopefully i'll post it again after some work on it. 
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| inkrist | Mar 12 2006, 08:12 AM Post #1240 |
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Love the otter Malakym
He's cute, though looks more like a ferret or a weasel. Otters usually have that mustache look to em Wow Comlock, love the sketches! Very inspiring for me Very nice crits too humbleego.I like the log idea too. If it is coming out of the picture, maybe it should have a bit of focus and detail in the picture. Maybe a section of the log is cut out and you can see ants bickering or something. |
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| Monsieur Rat | Mar 12 2006, 09:20 AM Post #1241 |
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Com: Looking better than ever. But if you're going to have part of the image extend from the frame itself, it may be beneficial for you to mess with the angle at which the gnomes (people, not really sure) are facing each other, so that as the other immigrants are off into the distance, there is one fluid path with which the scene flows. Starting with some trunk, we get the ants marching along, then the Madame on the log facing slighty to the horizon and in front of her and the to left, facing more towards our direction, there is the man. They can be in their peak arguing modes, and the rest of the exodus is progressing onwards, maybe with some people looking back over their shoulders in confusion. Mute: I like it, and I'm glad your learning masking, because it can be a God given gift when used with the right subtlties. As for the mill itself, though fairly good as it is, I think it would be nice to have it at a sort of 3/4 view or something. This way we have the blades coming in with growth towards us and shrink as they move away. Great chance to throw in some strong forshortening skills. This will also help to fix the nasty, near blurry effect you're getting from having the shadows move right behind the blades themselves. This might be too difficult for a beginning thing though, so just do what you can, and see how it turns out. Then learn from any more mistakes or tweak if there are no major issues at all :D. |
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| Comlock | Mar 12 2006, 07:14 PM Post #1242 |
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Thanx for the crits. I'll think Ill draw some of the people going towards the mountain to look back at the two main characters. I changed the pose on both of the people. Making them seem a bit more frustrated. and leaning the man more forward becasue of the weight of the sack. added ants. But I should change the path of the people now, since it no longer seems like "the journey begins" It looks like it allready started 
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| crumb | Mar 12 2006, 07:58 PM Post #1243 |
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i love the little guy with the eyeglass. i had to carry bags that big 
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| Villageidiot | Mar 12 2006, 08:05 PM Post #1244 |
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muuuunch....don't lie we all know you're too small to carry that....
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| Monsieur Rat | Mar 12 2006, 10:00 PM Post #1245 |
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Wow, Commie, definately looking sexy! And as for it already starting, what if it just starts once they make it too those mountains? Then it hasn't really started yet
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| Master Rade | Mar 13 2006, 03:30 AM Post #1246 |
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Wow Comlock thats some great piece your making. The guy with feathers and an eye glass rocks! Can I make some small suggestions. The back pack should look a little over stuff. Things sticking out like a pot or pan. small compartments on the side and maybe tie a small knife around the side pocekts of the man or wemon. Um im been camping for good years in my life and i have notice. Where are there sleeping bags? Just some taughts, have fun comlock, peace also make it look like its going to rain on the other side of the mountain. It awalys rain once on every trip I been, thus why makes it seem those two are in a rsuh with the map or something. |
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| Cwork | Mar 13 2006, 04:25 AM Post #1247 |
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WOW COMLOCK. I am freaking in love with that. That is now my desktop wallpaper. I'm really diggin' the style, I'm not sure why. It almost reminds me of an old disney movie or Treasure Planet or something. Keep it upppp!!!
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| Cwork | Mar 13 2006, 04:28 AM Post #1248 |
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SpongeBob
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Edit: Whoops, double post. Anyone know how to delete?! I can't find it anywhere. 
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| Comlock | Mar 13 2006, 06:20 AM Post #1249 |
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Thanx for the nice comments all=) Rade: the sleeping bags are allready there (the circle looking things on top) (the girl has one, the old man has two)  I coloured the main colours on the ants and the people. Changed the design of the mounain. I tried to make it look more intresting to look at. Added more details on the log. I also adjusted the composition a bit, so it matched the "rule of the 3rd" better. Some adjustments on the clouds... |
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| Cwork | Mar 13 2006, 06:28 AM Post #1250 |
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I love the fishing pole, great touch. |
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