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| Doomed; My first story | |
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| Tweet Topic Started: Jan 14 2006, 08:56 AM (110 Views) | |
| Jdave | Jan 14 2006, 08:56 AM Post #1 |
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Well this was an assignment for a class, I call it Doomed to Live, its kinda cryptic at first. Im not really good at writing so love it, hate it, like it, whatever, tips to help make my writing better are appreciated. In some place, whose time and name is not known nor is it needed, there is a race of beings whose real name we do not know of yet, but for now they do not need a name. These beings are destined to destroy themselves and most creatures around them; it is how they live whether they die by time’s hands, their own hands or each others hands. Rarely are they killed by nature’s hand anymore. No, more and more they have been killing each other, if they would only work together, if they did that then they would rise to greatness. Yet they continue this useless fighting and quarreling, time and time again. At this moment we view two of these beings arguing over something petty and that is not really needed, and as suddenly as the argument began it has escalated to a fight, they are now, as we speak, killing each other over this. We see this repeated all over this world, drawn out for long periods at a time. These creatures are truly doomed as they are to die, are known as man, their home planet is earth. They will eventually destroy themselves and each other. Yea I know it sounds strange but thats my writing style. |
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| scottishkilt | Jan 14 2006, 08:58 AM Post #2 |
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was that inspired by this: story mabey, sorry if it wasn't it is a good point, the perspective is taken kind of strangely though |
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| Jdave | Jan 14 2006, 09:02 AM Post #3 |
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I wouldnt say inspired, it wa inspired by several things, your story helped me along as sort of an example of one of the things that we fight and kill each other over. I have my ideas from other places too. On the perspective I went for 3rd person, limited/omniscient. |
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| scottishkilt | Jan 14 2006, 09:05 AM Post #4 |
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you made me feel special, my comment on the prespective would completeley go away if it was a bit longer, but i am guessing the length had something to do with the assignment, mabey we should do a series, you know work together, that would be sweet
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| Jdave | Jan 14 2006, 09:11 AM Post #5 |
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Well the length was my fault I didnt have alot of time to do it and well I wasnt sure on how to get my ideas onto paper and still have my classmates understand it................for the most part. But I wouldve definately made it longer if I couldve transplanted my ideas to writing. Oh and working together, Im open for it
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| scottishkilt | Jan 14 2006, 09:13 AM Post #6 |
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you never said anything about working togehter
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| Jdave | Jan 14 2006, 09:17 AM Post #7 |
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Yes I did, you just have to refresh the page, but yes I would enjoy working with you. |
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