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| The Wizard and the Samurai chapter 1 | |
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| Tweet Topic Started: Oct 26 2007, 05:23 PM (260 Views) | |
| gokenshadow | Oct 26 2007, 05:23 PM Post #1 |
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Once upon a time, a long time ago, there was town known at the time as Tehthsar. And in Tehthsar, there lived a young samurai in training, who was about five years old named Vin. He was doing his daily chores for his sick father. He was carrying some milk in a jar on the road that went to his father's house. This road happened to be 2 miles long. He had been walking for three hours when he got tired and sat down at the side of the road. "I hope this milk doesn't go bad." he said to himself as he sat down. He rested for about five minutes then picked up his jar and started on the road again, "It shouldn't be that far now." he said as walked on. After about an hour he finally saw his town. He was very happy and started running towards his father's house. Just as he saw his father's house he tripped on a large rock that happened to be in the middle of the road. The jar filled with precious milk flew out of his hands and hit the ground, splashing all the milk out. He quickly ran towards the jar, grabbed it and looked into it. Almost all the milk was gone. There was a cup full at most left. He dropped the jar and started to cry. Suddenly he heard a sound behind him, he quickly turned, still crying. He saw a boy about his age dressed in weird clothes come out of the alleyway holding something behind his back. He wore a robe that went down to his feet and a hat that had a point on top. He looked at Vin and said, "I apologize, it was my fault you tripped, here you can have this milk." He revealed a jar of milk from behind his back, the same exact size of Vin's. Vin took it out of his ands in a thankful way and then just stood there. There came a strange sound, a little like a bird chirp, but much longer. "If you'll excuse me, I must be going." the strange boy said as around and started to walk away, he stopped for a moment and said, "Oh, and by the way, my name is Matthew, what's yours?" Vin looked up at him and said, "Uhh I'm Vin, thank you for the milk." Mathew bowed then turned around and walked away with his hand in the air saying, "Farewell, Vin." Then suddenly, smoke went all around him and he vanished. Vin was in shock, "Where'd he go!?" he exclaimed. He stood there trying to think of how that could happen. After being puzzled for a while he decided to go back to his house and give the milk to his father. He walked towards his house thinking about what had just happened. "How did he disappear? Is he magic?" He got to the house and reached for the doorknob which was above him. He opened the door and walked in. His father was laying on a bed. "You're late." he said angrily, "Explain yourself." Vin put down the jar than said, "I something amazing today!" Vin said his words very fast, "I was on my way home with the milk and tripped and fell, then a boy with a pointy hat came up to me and gave me a jar of milk then he walked away and smoke went all around him and he disappeared!" His father was surprised, and it took a minute for all of Vin's words to sink in. When they did, he was very angry as he yelled at Vin, "A wizard, this milk is from a wizard!" He kicked the jar over, spilling out almost all of the milk. "I'm not drinking anything provided by a wizard!" Vin's was now focussed entirely on the milk as he saw it start to sink into the floor. He screamed, "Why did you do that, why'd you do that Dad!" then started crying. His father kept yelling, "Wizards are the enemy! We've been at war with them for thirty years!" Vin cry-screamed back, "But he couldn't be the enemy! He wasn't mean, he was nice! He gave m-" "I don't care what he gave you, that could be poisonous for all we know!" his father screamed back interrupting him. He continued speaking, "The wizards are deceitful beasts they have been that way since the war started, I lost my friends my wife, and almost y-" He noticed that Vin wasn't paying attention. He looked down and saw Vin with some milk in his hands drinking it. "Don't drink that! It's poisonous!" Vin's father yelled. Vin just continued drinking. After he fininshed he got up and said, in a cry-like manner, "See, it's not poisonous, see, Matthews not a bad person." His father stared at him and started to calm down and spoke, "He told you his name?" Vin looked a little confused but still said, "Yes." His father looked at the milk and said to himself, "Wizards never tell they're name to anyone but they're own kind." He looked back at his son more calmly and said, "Let me see that milk." Vin picked up the jar and gave it to his father. There was only a little left in it. His father dipped his finger in the remaining milk and tasted it. After tasting it he drank the remainder of it. When he was fininshed he said to his son, "I haven't had milk this good in a long time." Vin smiled and gave his father a hug. ... I suck at writing. |
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| Monkeyshizznick | Oct 27 2007, 07:14 AM Post #2 |
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that was pretty coo actually it wasnt very discriptive, but it didnt matter, i got a nice visual out of it all there could be a great story with all of this, i was kind of thinking that maybe mathew and vin would meet again a year or so later, or some such, or maybe even a week, become friends, then have a nice kind of same story for mathew as in after mathew leaves, have him appear to his dad, and have a fight or some such... skipping ahead a LOT have then together try to end the war, with a few twists and turns maybe a third enemy was the one who caused the war between the wizards and samurai, and vin and mathew find that out anywho im just going on a little to much nice idea, good job |
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