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BLACK Feedback; 08/26/12
Topic Started: Aug 26 2012, 08:16 PM (86 Views)
Lita Maivia
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Show is up. Thanks to Onslaught and Wight for their contributions to the segments. Big thanks to the Boy and Wight for giving me advice on writing Kursur and PiG (though I'm not sure if it actually helped). Same goes for Onslaught on advice for writing the Prince, I hope I managed to capture him well in the main-event.

Bring on the constructive criticism, folks! Remember that I'll be writing these characters for the next few weeks and I need all the help I can get!

Card will be up soon, I hope.

EDIT: Flubbed up already. Sorry about that, folks. Thought neither Jessica Knight or Rin Takeda were RPed. Turns out there was a very small Jessica RP and so I edited in their match and included a small promo involving Lucas and KISUKE.
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Minister Wighty
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Great work. Ordinarily I probably wouldn't put a C4 board in a non-PPV show... BUT~ it fits Holland so well as a character to push those limits.

I thought almost everything was VERY well-written. Not entirely sold on the Kim/Prince promo, but I think it's because they're two in-control alphas coming to blows and that's never pretty in any stretch of the imagination. All other things were both interesting, and easy to read.

Good job so far.

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Onslaught
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It was a good read. The Prince was handled fine. Wighty, as for the Kim/Prince feud, I actually have some ideas in the works, so I think it'll pick up and be less of a "two alphas butting heads" thing. Kim, I will of course fill you in on these ideas.

The match summaries all read well and managed to give just enough to make me feel like I understood the match dynamics.
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Sqweaktoy
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Solid read all round I have to say. You did great on the Kursur match, I like that he was cheating even when it was entirely unnecessary. The Prince/Kim Feud has some interesting routes forming around it. I could end up being really awesome, looking forward to how things turn out.
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Nightmare
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That was a great show. LOVED how things went with the Holland match. And I'm loving that a real rivalry has started between him and the Danse Macabre. Can't wait for this to develop further.
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