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| Topic Started: Sep 26 2006, 04:19 PM (136 Views) | |
| gegojr | Sep 26 2006, 04:19 PM Post #1 |
Our Eventual Death Is Near
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For this competition I proudly present to you a story which I think is the best I've ever written before. Without further ado, I present to you: CRIMSON CHAINS By Gegojr (T. W.) My friends and I walked down Main St. from school one day thinking we’d all be home by five like usual. But by the end of this day, unfortunately, some of us wouldn’t be making it home at all. Cassie walked ahead of us as usual. She seemed to be the ‘leader’ of our little group. She had short black hair and was pretty tall. “Wait up!” I nagged. I liked to walk slow most of the time and enjoy the moment. “Stop falling behind, Andrew.” Sean, my shorter and more annoying friend said, snickering. He wore a dark blue jacket all the time, and I grew sick of the noise it made whenever his arms moved. I don’t know… it was just a pet peeve I had at the time I suppose. “Shut up Sean!” I yelled, and for almost no reason at all, I caught up to punch him in the arm. He retaliated. He stuck out his foot and pushed me into it, and I fell into the ground and in the process, I scraped my hands raw. “Stop it you retards!” Forest, my tall, orange hair, pale freckled skinned friend said. He pulled me up by my arm and pushed Sean away. Forest usually tried to keep the peace between all of us. He usually did a good job of it too, for secretly me and Sean both feared him… just a little. His brooding stature was a little threatening at times. But he was a good kid at heart. “Jeez, Sean, you’re so stupi- woah!” I gasped, and my foot broke a small hole in the ground tripping me. I rolled over and on my back, catching my breath. Forest helped me up again and I pulled my twisted foot out. It hurt, but I was pretty good at masking my pain. “Look!” said Cassie, “That’s a deep hole where you fell!” For some reason I giggled, and for a brief moment my eyes met Cassie’s and I felt really warm inside. I guess I secretly liked her. “You’re pretty lucky, Andrew.” Said Forest, breaking another piece off the hole. Instead of cement or rock, like the rest of the side walk, it was made of wood. We all peered down the hole. It was about as wide as I was, and so I secretly thanked God that I didn’t fall in. If I was walking too slowly, I could have. “It looks like there’s a ladder… if you break some more wood off, we could get to it.” Sean suggested. And so Forest did so. He slammed his foot down and the chunk of wood blocking our way snapped off. “Wow, this is pretty weird.” Forest said, scratching his head and looking down the hole. He also noticed that this entire section of the sidewalk was made of wood. I noticed an orange flickering light bouncing off of the steel ladder. “Are we… the only ones on this street? It’s usually bustling with people.” Cassie asked, looking around with her hands on her hips. It’s a real shame. She was so pretty. An eerie silence seemed to wrap around us like a warm blanket. Some strange feeling of temptation made me say these next, chilling words that I wish I never said in the first place. “Let’s go down, guys!” Secretly I was scared. I didn’t like dark places, even though that was the impression that I tried to give out by turning Goth. Well, I wasn’t truly Goth… I mean, I was really… not… depressed all the time. I guess I just liked to dress that way. “You’re really gonna go down before us?” Sean said sarcastically. “Shut up, Sean.” I replied. I had to impress my friends. I checked to see if the ladder was stable and I started my descent. A little hesitant at first, Forest followed. Then Sean, and finally, forcing herself to do it, Cassie. I reached the floor about twenty feet down. The flickering light shined throughout the circular room. The air was musty, and the dusty marble floor, with chunks of dirt and wood and stones littered about, was quite slippery. “Gosh, it’s hard to breathe here.” I sputtered out. “Wow!” Sean cried in amazement, “What is this place?!” He ran his hands along the stone walls riddled with crosses. Crosses were a weird thing to see here. Most of the city was Mormon, and Mormons didn’t worship crosses. In the middle of the chamber there was what appeared to be a large manhole with a tall sword driven into it. The orange light emitted from the resulting cracks. “What the hell?” said Cassie, looking at the strange sight. The paper which I recorded my memories is already stained with my dry, salty tears. It’s quite difficult to go on. I’d like you to know that. Sean jumped onto the vertical emission and wrapped his dirty fingers around the hilt of the demonic sword. “Guys! Check it out!” said he, “It’s like the sword in the stone!” “Dude! What are you doing?!” Forest yelled in defiance. “I’m fantasizing. Is that so wrong?” answered Sean, who glared at Forest. “That sword looks evil!” I said, examining the strange designs, beautifully crafted together. Hellish demons, bat wings seeming to pull of in both directs of the sword, bones and ancient writings I couldn’t understand. “I’ma the King of Great Briton!” said Sean, who pulled the sword out. As soon as he did, an intolerable heat swept across the room in every direction, and orange flames shot out like a serpent’s tongue! The flames darted up the sword and around the handle, scalding Sean’s hands to the metal carvings. “Aaargh!” he screamed. I had no idea how to react. As Forest quickly rescued Sean from the fire, dragging his charcoaled body out to safety, the cracks in the cap of the hole grew bigger. More fire bolted out and I knocked me backwards. I watched Cassie run to the ladder, but the ladder magically shattered at the touch. She screamed as the steel ladder fell apart like broken glass, and I had lost most of my hope of getting out. Had we hit a fuel pipe? I wondered, but then again, how could this be a fuel pipe? This was definitely something weird The raging fire finally broke loose a few seconds later, launching small debris into the air. The sword vanished into the fire. “Hey! You ok?!” Forest screamed to me while lifting a marble block off of his seemingly broken leg. He was strong though. He stood up and dragged Sean, who cried out in pain, to a corner. “I’m… erk… fine!” I answered slowly, removing shards of marble and stone from my shirt. I stood up. “Cassie?!” Forest asked through the dust and heat. “Yeah, I’m ok!” she answered, coughing. The fire which had nearly killed all of us disappeared. I crept towards the opened hole to see what would lye below. Too my horror, a painful looking creature brandishing burnt brown skin and long, sickly legs crawled towards me. I shrieked and slipped on a piece of wood when I turned around. Fumbling around to get up, I darted across the room near Forest, Sean, and Cassie. “What is it?” Forest asked me, still tending to his burnt friend Sean. “M-Monster!” I screamed, trying to stop my mouth from shaking. The demonic creature revealed his hands into our world, reaching over the lip of the portal and pulling itself up. It crawled towards us slowly. In its face I could sense great hatred, though it had neither eyes nor mouth. It seemed as though it was saying, see what you’ve created?! It seemed to growl as it jumped at us, but before I could realize what was happening and let out a scream the beast was pulled back by sharp, spiked black chains that instantly ‘jumped’ out of the hellhole and wrapped around the demon. The chains ripped into the demon’s soft, tangy flesh and pulled him back in. Cassie just sat in the corner, on the broken shards of what was previously the ladder, holding her knees and shaking uncontrollably. Forest mouth seemed to drop to the floor. I was shaking too. With varying amounts of difficulty, we all stood up. Even Sean managed to stand up, who was holding his burnt hands together in pain. “We have to get outta here!” Sean screamed, waving his fingerless hands around violently. We were all horrified. “What the hell was that?” Cassie muttered. “What happened to the ladder?” I asked, watching the hole which was, unfortunately, twenty feet above. “WHAT THE HELL WAS THAT?!” Cassie screamed with all her might. “Calm down! Cassie! We don’t know!” Forest yelled, grabbing her by the shoulders. “HOW THE **** AM I SUPPOSED TO CALM DOWN?!” “Cassie! Sean’s burned! We have to rush him to the hospital!” I cried daringly. Cassie broke out in tears. About five seconds later, another set of bloody spiked chains leaped out of the hole, twirled in the air, and sent themselves towards Sean. “NO! NO! N-..!” Sean cried, being brought into the air. The chains ripped into his heart, and pinned him to a nearby wall. “Erk!” He grunted loudly. Then the life swept out of him. “Sean!” Cassie screamed, covering her eyes as the chains pulled so tight as to rip him apart. “Oh god.” Forest gasped, covering his mouth. I turned away and covered my ears. I couldn’t stand to watch or even hear the sound of ‘gore’. Blood sprayed all over us, showering the walls and painting them scarlet. Sean’s limbs flailed about the room and slammed into the circular walls; hard. Blood seeped into the crosses and seemed to activate an ancient mechanism. Stone gears turned behind the walls which slid open slowly, revealing another room. Behind the now red crosses were three large swords. They were gleaming white, and shined brightly in contrast to the darkness around them. Cassie and Forest immediately ran to the room away from all the blood and gore, and each took a single sword. They appeared to have no other option. I followed and did the same. Fumbling with the heavy holy sword, I slid it out of its long scabbard and raised it ready to fight like a knight in some movie I had previously seen. The hellfire spewed more dreadful heat, burning the flesh that lay all over the place and dried Sean’s blood to a dark crisp. “I don’t know what to do!” Forest cried, resting the four foot long sword on the marble floor. “Why did you make us come down here?!” Cassie hollered, dropping the sword and bursting to tears. She fell to her knees. As soon as she had lost all hope, yet another set of chains floated out of the portal. The chains launched at here, piercing her shoulders, and wrapped around her arms. “CASSIE!!!” I screamed, and after raising my sword I swung down hard, chopping the chains which pulled back into the portal as if they could feel pain. Cassie dropped to the floor, screaming as she bled where the hot iron chains penetrated her skin. “NO! They… BURN! Oh my go…od…” she screeched, her hands shaking and covered in blood. “Cassie, you’re gonna be ok!” I cried, holding her in my arms. The chains cut into my arms and burned them too, but I dismissed the pain as best I could. I cried as I realized her heart had come to a halt. “NO! Don’t leave us!” I screamed, but it was no use. I was holding a lifeless shell. Forest turned away. He may have been tall and strong, but even the strongest man on Earth would be scared in our situation. It appeared we had opened a portal to hell, right here in Utah, and there was no way out. 
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| cman710 | Sep 26 2006, 05:01 PM Post #2 |
The Master of Plot Twists
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It's, interesting.... I wouldn't call it "The best you've ever written" like you said on the phone though..... |
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| gegojr | Mar 10 2007, 10:45 AM Post #3 |
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Our Eventual Death Is Near
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I turned this in for my creative writing class cuz I forgot to write something new. Everyone said it was fantastic! I had to edit it a little though lol X-| |
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