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| Groundrise; he was a special badger... | |
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| Tweet Topic Started: Jan 24 2009, 07:01 PM (355 Views) | |
| hawkstar | Jan 24 2009, 07:01 PM Post #1 |
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Elder
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position: Groundclan founder Aprox. age: 40 moons when he died Description: A large badger. He is very fast and has blue eyes. He has a large white stripe. Personallity: Very friendly. he cares about all life. However he always had one flaw he would do anything to make sure the clan's life was peaceful which led to a few meltdowns. History: Groundrise was a very kind badger. When he was given the lives of a leader somehow he was given more then nine lives. One day something horrible happened: Some crystles with a large amount of power awoke, and started to absorb the life force from all things from the smallest insect to the largest bird. Then Groundrise went to the mountin. And gave up all of his lives to restore life. Relations:(please don't put anything here, all relations info goes in the below sections of kin mate mento and appretice. kin: Two unnamed badgers mate:Unnamed she badger mentor: apprentice: |
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| Aurorastar | Jan 24 2009, 08:21 PM Post #2 |
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Master of the Elements!
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Well capitalization is definetly needed.... in quite a few places... And badgers aren't white (or have blue eyes) unless they're albino (in which case they'd have pink eyes). Personality isn't very detailed. History confuses me a bit... *hovers around trying to choose words* Yeah.. The whole 'all life threatened' thing bugs me. But yeah.. |
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<center>HK-47: "Query: Would you rather be caught with contraband that is very illegal, or just a little illegal?" Revan: "What's the difference?" HK-47: "About twenty years, master..."</center> | |
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| hawkstar | Jan 24 2009, 08:25 PM Post #3 |
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Elder
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what does that mean? |
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| Spottedstar | Jan 24 2009, 10:17 PM Post #4 |
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Mahna Mahna!
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She's giving you suggestions on how to improve Groundrise's profile. In which case you might want to try and do all of them, since she is the only one to accept the character.
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"...if your knees aren't green by the end of the day, you ought to seriously re-examine your life." ~ Bill Watterson; Calvin & Hobbes Zoolander Meets Twilight: ( LOL!! XD ) ![]() Siggie pic © not to me!! | |
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| hawkstar | Jan 25 2009, 05:12 PM Post #5 |
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Elder
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so if I don't he isn't accepted? |
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| Spottedstar | Jan 26 2009, 05:46 PM Post #6 |
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Mahna Mahna!
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Well, that's not for me to call - it's Aurorastar's. But by the way things naturally run around here, my guess would be "yes". |
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"...if your knees aren't green by the end of the day, you ought to seriously re-examine your life." ~ Bill Watterson; Calvin & Hobbes Zoolander Meets Twilight: ( LOL!! XD ) ![]() Siggie pic © not to me!! | |
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| hawkstar | Jan 26 2009, 06:29 PM Post #7 |
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Elder
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well I fixed it. |
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| Aurorastar | Jan 31 2009, 04:38 PM Post #8 |
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Master of the Elements!
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No, it's still missing a lot of capitalization. You need a capital letter at the beggining of every sentence. :rolleyes: And I did say that badgers don't have blue eyes didn't I? Interesting history, will need to dwell on that for a bit before I make a final decision. |
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| Galeclaw | Feb 1 2009, 09:08 AM Post #9 |
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"Cares" doesn't have an apostraphe. And you need to add more to his personality. |
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