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[REMOVED] Jaws of Oblivion - The Way of The Blade; Removed
Topic Started: Sunday, 15. August 2010, 23:06 (276 Views)
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Edited by Wolfe, Friday, 21. October 2011, 16:42.
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That's a lot of placeholders. THis is going to be a loooong story, isn't it?

that's good. I love long stories, and those are the kinds i write myself. The hardest thing is keeping the plot coherent and not wandering off on tangents. Don't do that, or you won't be able to finish it. I haven't played the Elder Scrolls games, but I think I'll look them up. Either way the universe seems interesting.

When a chapters starts out you seem to be a little redundant or repititive, but after you get "warmed up" writing it gets much better. Don't be afraid to go back and change that. Also I'm curious, why is "faill" spelled with two L's?

Also, I know how incredibly much work a really long fantasy is, and how easy it is to get discouraged too. This is a fanfiction, so you didn't have to create the universe, which is an advantage, but don't forget detail, that seems lacking a little. But the story flows very well and it sounds like it's written by someone who's been writing a while. It's nice to read.

Don't forget to stay organized. Write down stuff like dates, birthdays, details about appearance etc in a text file for record-keeping. I once forgot I wrote the height of one of my characters in Picture Imperfect, which was an unrealistic one by the way, lol, and later wrote it again, so she has two heights now, 5'11 and 5'9, which is a huge difference. Even those are becoming unorganized right now lol.

The one last thing I noticed is that there is no metaphor in there whatsoever. Sometimes metaphor helps us understand better than just saying it, and it adds extra interest too. Just a suggestin. Anyway I can't wait to read more. It seems to be an interesting story, and it would be nice to know more about the universe.
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Lion Heart, you are a really great writer, and I think you will go far in life if you haven't already. :X
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thanks taco man. I appreciate it. Have you made any progress?
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