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Tale of the three Bohrok
Topic Started: Thursday, 4. November 2010, 15:36 (161 Views)
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Hello there.

I am not one to tell strange stories, stories twisted in time and space, but sometimes, just sometimes, I feel that I have just a few stories to tell. This moment is one of them. Being a Toa of Ice, I am not sure whether you will believe me. Although I am calm and rarely big-headed, I can go over the top just like every other Toa. But I think you will enjoy this one.

As usual, I was on patrol on the snowy peaks of Mount Ihu. Sometimes I grow sick of those peaks. Any Toa would eventually, even the coldest of Toa. But that day, I was thinking of going elsewhere. Pohatu had been bothering me for ages about meeting up, and if it wasn't for the events that followed, I believe I would have gone and met up with him.

At first, I thought it was a shooting star. It was getting dark, and at that time of year, shooting stars are common. But when this one crashed a few miles ahead of me, I had to go and investigate. Wouldn't you?

As I was saying, I was walking up to where what ever it was landed, and I could hear voices. I couldn't 'hear' hear them, though. It was as if they were speaking in my head and unaware of their doing so. And they were angry. Pretty shocked too.

When I finally get there, I see not one, but three Bohrok. Of course, this happening during the Bohrok swarm attacks meant I was instantly in attack mode. But these Bohrok... They were large, black and very round, with large greeny-yellow eyes and rather high-tech chainsaws attached to their hands. This is all normal for a Bohrok, but these ones had silver and grey armour too. Oh, and tails. Strange, organic tails. Nothing I'd ever seen on any other Bohrok. They were also completely identical. More so than ordinary Bohrok. Right down to the chips in their armour.

Suspecting that they were swarm leaders, I attacked immediately, only to be shoved back by, of all things, a gravity shield. Gravity Bohrok? I had never encountered such a thing. Worse, they had the high-ground.

"Hey, white guy robot thing!" one of them shouted as it threw me back. "I am busy arguing with myself! Wait a second!"

I was shocked by this. Never had a Bohrok spoken to me. How dare it be so rude?

As they argue, I pace around them. They were dangerous. They were arguing. If they did anything stupid, they may cause an avalanche.

"But you are I and I am you and he is I and you! We're all the same guy!"

"Duh! But how do we get back together?"

"Wait until the next time warp gets us?"

"But what if?"

"We know. Too little info! Just shut up!"

"I was about to say that."

"I know."

After much frustration, they suddenly turn to face me. I, meanwhile, have thought up a plan.

"So, robot white ice thing, got a name?"

"I am Kopaka, Toa of ice. That is all you need to know, Bohrok." I reply, making myself seem hostile for no reason.

"Good for you. How do we get out of here. Or should I say 'I'. because those two are really copies of me..." the first one replied.

"Liar. I'm the real one."

With that, they started arguing again. That was, until I create an ice spike between them, splitting them up. In the confusion, I attack the third Bohrok and knock its head open.

What was already a strange situation just got stranger.

"OW!" The Bohrok shouted as it flipped its head shield back up. The other two Bohrok also shouted in exactly the same way, despite their head shields still being closed. Maybe they were the same being? "What the funk are you trying to do? Steal my Krana?"

I stare at the Bohrok.

"I'll take that as a yes. I don't know where you're from, matey, or where we are, but that's just rude!"

In my confusion, I failed to notice the other Bohrok preparing an attack. Knowing that I have got myself surrounded, I readied my shield, waiting for the first blow.

"I think we'll have to teach you a lesson, buddy! Us Syprians aren't ones to be messed with! Even if you're only facing on of them which has split into three!"

But before they could attack, everything faded into bright white light. I closed my eyes, wondering if this is some special attack of theirs, awaiting the pain but standing firm.

Once the light fades, however, I opened my eyes to see that they were gone.


I walked home, back to Ko-Koro, utterly confused but glad that they were gone.


Since that day, I have been unable to explain the events that unfolded before me.

I have a whole website. It's kinda lame though.
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Ooh, cliffhanger. You cliffhanged me. You should be ashamed of yourself.

So I used to be really into Bionicles. The first Bohrok swarm was actually a really good idea, and it was probably the best moment in the entire series. The Bohrok-Kal were truly disappointing, but the first ones...good stuff, good stuff. My favorite Toa would be Onua now, because he's the only one with any common sense at all, but I used to like Kopaka more. He was cool. Obviously.

My interpretation of Kopaka was that he was indifferent to basically anything that wasn't a life-or-death situation. No one's quite sure what he thinks about, but everyone knows that he never gets sidetracked. Now, your perception of him may be different, but I see him getting lost on side tracks a lot. I thought minimalist writing would be best for his style. Yours is pretty close already, but Kopaka says only what's absolutely nessecary. He's honorable, strong, brave, intelligent. but mostly silent. Come to think of it, he's Batman but less psychologically tortured.

I was shocked by this. Never had a Bohrok spoken to me. How dare it be so rude?

I laughed, because it was funny, but it was the wrong kind of joke for Kopaka. The few times he does make a joke, he's hilarious, but he only uses sarcasm and dry humor. If he's actually being serious, then he's a lot more stuck up than I thought.

I am wondering about that bohrok, though. His Krana simply isn't connected to the swarm, and so he's sentient, able to think on his own, but has no knowledge of the world (which is why he didn't know what a Toa was). Or there's something else entirely in his Krana slot? Anyway, you've got me curious!
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Thursday, 4. November 2010, 22:27
I am wondering about that bohrok, though. His Krana simply isn't connected to the swarm, and so he's sentient, able to think on his own, but has no knowledge of the world (which is why he didn't know what a Toa was). Or there's something else entirely in his Krana slot? Anyway, you've got me curious!
No, it's not very Kopaka-y the way it's written, but he's supposed to be thinking back, so it must have been a long time ago.

As for the mysterious Bohrok, you'll see who he was depending on how far I get in my NaNoWriMo entry.
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