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| Warrior Poet | Friday, 3. December 2010, 19:08 Post #1 |
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If you lead me, I will go.
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Er....I don't even remember what this one was about, originally. I wrote it...how long ago? Ere breaking the lines we stood Taking in the sight before us Dare they behold Excalibur Cutting through the very sunlight Innately satisfied Fulfilling its design Anon I realized What was the gain if I won? Nevertheless the sword called The clouds broke, the storm swirled Bitter rain slicks the ground Scarlet with the tears of their hearts If I should fall, it's all for naught naught which makes it worth If those who live by the sword Die by the sword Then who am I protecting? Let thy shield guard thee faithfully Better faith than thine in me What's the gain to be a king Run through by hatred and rust As Mordred's ashes return to dust What little breath is left to us What folly to think Avalon was safe Does running from wonds bring them farther away? The sound of battle is chaos to my ears Ere I realized why I fought How was I to ask "What have I wrought?" |
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| James | Tuesday, 7. December 2010, 03:50 Post #2 |
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it's all cool
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o.o ... wow, nice. lol, I am so good at constructive crits, lemme tell ya. But um... Good job! |
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| Harket | Saturday, 18. December 2010, 04:50 Post #3 |
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That didnt make sense in a it made sense way. But i'm still having Riona aftereffects, so i'm not really gonna do anything 'cept say this was actually really good.
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| Warrior Poet | Saturday, 18. December 2010, 05:03 Post #4 |
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Meh, it doesn't actually make any sense to me either. Something about King Arthur and inconsistency. |
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| Harket | Saturday, 18. December 2010, 05:26 Post #5 |
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How very nice. Nvm, it sounded cool.
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Nvm, it sounded cool.
2:30 PM Jul 11