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| Literacy Maniac | Friday, 17. December 2010, 07:44 Post #1 |
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It’s all over now, and I’m trying to think on Where do I start this clean-up Do I get rid of the scars, do I cleanse my mind Do I just let it fade; maybe it’s a matter of Sticks and stones and broken bones, or should I just forget about everything that happened? Maybe I should say I never went there because After all, I bear proof of there not being a More horrible hellhole of a school Just my luck that I went there, I suppose… Undecided yet, but certain on what to do in years In the job or not, I’ll bring it to the eyes of the law Years old, perhaps, but revenge is sweet And they can whinge and whine all they want I’m going to be the death of them. But the question at the moment is - what now? |
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| Warrior Poet | Saturday, 18. December 2010, 00:41 Post #2 |
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Props for using the word "whinge." That's one you don't hear every day. Bringing them to justice is good. Justice != to revenge though. What now? Suppertime, actually. Gotta go and eat food. Bye
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| Harket | Saturday, 18. December 2010, 02:57 Post #3 |
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Actually, everything was going fine and nice and sunny and i was really getting into it until- That was a little weird, and threw me off, though i dont know why. AFter that i settled right back in, though. ![]() But you know, i really really liked this. No kidding. It was really awesome. <3 +1.
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| James | Saturday, 18. December 2010, 03:04 Post #4 |
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Niiiiice. Nicely done, but I agree with Sweetie. That spot was a little off.
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| Literacy Maniac | Saturday, 18. December 2010, 03:49 Post #5 |
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Thanks guys. I agree, that line was a little weak, but I can't really imagine it any other way. |
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| Harket | Saturday, 18. December 2010, 04:06 Post #6 |
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Do you really HATE school that much? I'm sure there are some good points!
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| Literacy Maniac | Saturday, 18. December 2010, 04:51 Post #7 |
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No, I hate THAT school. I like school, but I hate THE school I went to. |
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| Harket | Saturday, 18. December 2010, 05:38 Post #8 |
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*sadfacesadface* izzok, we all love you!~ |
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| Literacy Maniac | Saturday, 18. December 2010, 05:42 Post #9 |
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You may do, but they didn't. Difference. |
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| Harket | Saturday, 18. December 2010, 05:45 Post #10 |
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POint is, we'll always be here for you whether your life goes sucky or not ;D |
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| Literacy Maniac | Sunday, 19. December 2010, 03:48 Post #11 |
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I know. This was more of a venting graduation poem. |
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| Harket | Sunday, 19. December 2010, 06:41 Post #12 |
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Aww. <3 Huggles. At least you got out at last, right?
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| Literacy Maniac | Sunday, 19. December 2010, 07:45 Post #13 |
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Yeah, I know. Now on to what may be another hell on earth... |
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| James | Sunday, 19. December 2010, 22:15 Post #14 |
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If you wanted to, you could just make it 'more horrible school,' and it would flow a little better. Not perfectly, but a little more with the rhythm. |
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| Literacy Maniac | Monday, 20. December 2010, 00:13 Post #15 |
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I could have. But by hellhole I mean an utter nightmare. I'm sure there are schools that are really bad but aren't nightmares for those students who might get bullied. I'm saying my school was the hellhole of hellholes, in effect. |
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| Harket | Monday, 20. December 2010, 03:41 Post #16 |
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Actually, it all depends who youre writing this for. If its for yourself, keep it the way it is. If its for others to read, then change it! It depends on your audience, dearie.
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| Literacy Maniac | Monday, 20. December 2010, 07:52 Post #17 |
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I dunno. I seem to have this way of writing things that I like and other people like. You're living proof of that, and anyone can see that. |
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| Harket | Tuesday, 21. December 2010, 02:01 Post #18 |
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It depends on the person, no? There are some of your works i prefer, and others i dont take much to, but i always keep in mind someone looking at it from a different point of view will. |
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