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What Now?
Topic Started: Friday, 17. December 2010, 07:44 (118 Views)
Literacy Maniac
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It’s all over now, and I’m trying to think on
Where do I start this clean-up
Do I get rid of the scars, do I cleanse my mind
Do I just let it fade; maybe it’s a matter of
Sticks and stones and broken bones, or should
I just forget about everything that happened?
Maybe I should say I never went there because
After all, I bear proof of there not being a
More horrible hellhole of a school
Just my luck that I went there, I suppose…
Undecided yet, but certain on what to do in years
In the job or not, I’ll bring it to the eyes of the law
Years old, perhaps, but revenge is sweet
And they can whinge and whine all they want
I’m going to be the death of them.
But the question at the moment is - what now?
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Warrior Poet
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Props for using the word "whinge." That's one you don't hear every day.

Bringing them to justice is good. Justice != to revenge though.

What now? Suppertime, actually. Gotta go and eat food. Bye :)
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Actually, everything was going fine and nice and sunny and i was really getting into it until-
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More horrible hellhole of a school
That was a little weird, and threw me off, though i dont know why. AFter that i settled right back in, though. :)
But you know, i really really liked this. No kidding. :) It was really awesome. <3 +1.
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James
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Niiiiice. :) Nicely done, but I agree with Sweetie. That spot was a little off. :)
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Literacy Maniac
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Thanks guys.

I agree, that line was a little weak, but I can't really imagine it any other way.
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Harket
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Do you really HATE school that much? I'm sure there are some good points! :D
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Literacy Maniac
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No, I hate THAT school. I like school, but I hate THE school I went to.
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*sadfacesadface* izzok, we all love you!~
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Literacy Maniac
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You may do, but they didn't. Difference.
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POint is, we'll always be here for you whether your life goes sucky or not ;D
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Literacy Maniac
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I know. This was more of a venting graduation poem.
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Aww. <3 Huggles. At least you got out at last, right? :D
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Literacy Maniac
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Yeah, I know. Now on to what may be another hell on earth...
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James
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If you wanted to, you could just make it
'more horrible school,' and it would flow a little better. Not perfectly, but a little more with the rhythm.
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Literacy Maniac
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I could have. But by hellhole I mean an utter nightmare. I'm sure there are schools that are really bad but aren't nightmares for those students who might get bullied. I'm saying my school was the hellhole of hellholes, in effect.
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Actually, it all depends who youre writing this for. If its for yourself, keep it the way it is. If its for others to read, then change it! It depends on your audience, dearie. :)
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Literacy Maniac
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I dunno. I seem to have this way of writing things that I like and other people like. You're living proof of that, and anyone can see that.
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It depends on the person, no? There are some of your works i prefer, and others i dont take much to, but i always keep in mind someone looking at it from a different point of view will.
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