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Aamina
Topic Started: Wednesday, 22. December 2010, 04:56 (140 Views)
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This one tells the story of a Muslim immigrant girl who is beaten and murdered because of her religion, told from the perspective of her only friend. It's set in 2001, after 9/11, and when there was a lot of animosity against Muslims.

Aamina
I knew a girl who lived a while back
She was my next door neighbour
And she came from Saudi and
Belonged to a faith - she was a Muslim
A loose one, but Muslim still

Aamina, Aamina, where did you go?
Aamina, Aamina, who did you see?
Aamina, Aamina, what did you do?
Or was it your faith
That made them hate you?

We walked to school together
Sometimes I had to convince her to move
Though I wondered if it was a good idea
Our school was chock-a-block with bigots
And they all hated her

Aamina, Aamina, where did you go?
Aamina, Aamina, who did you see?
Aamina, Aamina, what did you do?
Or was it your faith
That made them attack you?

They took ‘initiative’ one day
A group walked up to us and
Started beating her for all they were worth
You could hardly believe the frenzy
She ended the day black and blue

Aamina, Aamina, where did you go?
Aamina, Aamina, who did you see?
Aamina, Aamina, what did you do?
Or was it your faith
That made her murder you?

We walked home, she was in tears
I didn’t try to stop the flow, I would have cried too
Our path took us across the road as usual
A car drove at us, I saw one of the beater’s mothers in it, and it hit us
She was killed, I was injured

Aamina, Aamina, where did you go?
Aamina, Aamina, who did you see?
Aamina, Aamina, what did you do?
Or was it your faith
That made them ignore you?

Police didn’t do anything
Nobody was brought to justice
Much to only my anger
And sometimes I wonder if
It was her faith that was the reason behind it all

Aamina, Aamina, where are you now?
Aamina, Aamina, who do you see?
Aamina, Aamina, what do you do?
Or are you reborn
In the guise of a luckier person than you?

The irony of it all was
Her name was Aamina
And that has a meaning
It comes from amina
Which means “feel safe”.

Aamina, Aamina, where are you now?
Aamina, Aamina, who do you see?
Aamina, Aamina, what do you do?
Or are you reborn
In the guise of a luckier person than you?
Edited by Literacy Maniac, Wednesday, 22. December 2010, 06:01.
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Oh. *sadface*

That was quite well written, and i dont really think i can find flaw with that. Alot of your poems are leaning toward this kind of theme now, no? That DID evoke emotion and i quite liked it. Repetition was good, cause it was neither too much nor too little. Great work.

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Thanks.

Yeah, I like writing about social issues of today.

Again, thanks! :)
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No problem. May i ask you - what perked your interest in all this kind of matters?
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I don't actually know. I just like reading about social issues, so I suppose it comes from that.
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How interesting. So you write about current and past social affairs? :)
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Yeah, more or less.
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Thats an interesting inspiration. Do you have friends like that, too, or...? Cause i think im like the only one in my school in my level who loves writing. :P
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No, I don't. It's a pity, but that's just how it goes.

Funny that I was like that too.
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Sorry, what do you mean by "like that?"
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Funny that I was the only kid in my grade who enjoyed writing to any degree of wanting to become an author and was voted 'Most Likely to Write a Best Seller Novel'.

And for some reason I was also voted, along with another equally smart kid, 'Most Likely to Become a Politician'.
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You think? I know i agree. Look, when i said you whip up a pretty mean argument, i meant it.
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Pfft. If I became a politician, my dad would disown me. He hates politicians.
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:o Why? I dont get all the politician thingies, but i know language and debate are very important. :)
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He thinks they're all corrupt, dishonest, and immoral.
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You could be the exception and MAKE HIM PROUD! :'D
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Oh, dang, I'm off subject. Back to the poem:
It was very well written, well thought out. It's thought-provoking, as I believe the majority of all good poems should be, and it brings back some truly haunting memories. Well done; keep up the good work!
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I could, couldn't I? The thing is my dad is a stereotypist, and I'm not sure if I'd be the exception to his stereotyping.

Thanks, Paroso.

EDIT: And yes, I hate Justin Bieber.
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=D Who doesnt?

Meh. You could always try.
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