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Because
Topic Started: Wednesday, 29. December 2010, 11:54 (71 Views)
Harket
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Because of how you took the blame
Because of how you ran away
Because of how you pushed me down
Because of how you fooled around
Because of how you made me smile
Because of how you saw me through
Because of how you then backed down
Because of how you stood your ground
Because of how you cast your spells
Because of how your curse i dread
Because of how you drive me mad
Because you were a selfless man
Because you did all that you could
Because you would do more - you would
Because you stabbed me thorough and through
Because you broke my heart in two
Because you confuse and make me hurt
Because you danced the dance of flirt
Because you left me crying there
Because you picked me up and stayed
Because you threw me down and left
Because you had the final stand
Because you used sweet honeyed words
Left the rudder of my heart unmanned.
Well, that was... weird. I wrote this in a really short time. ;D And don't worry, its not real. Honest! :)
Birds don't like to fly, they have to fly.
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Well, good to hear it's not real! Although this thing made basically no sense - At first I thought it was about some bully, and then a good friend, and then possibly Jesus, and then some weird romancer type, and now I'm totally not sure at all. No idea whatsoever lol.

Also, you started every line but the last with "because" but never actually said what happened because of what he did. Most of these were dependent clauses not attatched to an independent - you know, "because you made me laugh." Well, what's supposed to be before the word "because?"
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Harket
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Lets edit my words. It's not real - for me. Not all of it, anyway. It was kind of written... for somebody.

Kind of a love thing, but toward more then one person. And more then one type of love. I was there for this person who experienced this the whole way thorough, so. Yea.
Birds don't like to fly, they have to fly.
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