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| James | Tuesday, 11. January 2011, 19:40 Post #1 |
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it's all cool
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| Jessie | Tuesday, 11. January 2011, 19:53 Post #2 |
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Hippohypocamputhalamus
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Having not read the original, that really caught me off-guard. Fluent use of free-verse, and great imagery. Extremely... human. I hope you're really proud of this. Make sure to fix this typo:
I love how you follow a pattern with your language. It gives this a unique sense of timing and structure without sacrificing the informal, partly-impromptu nature of it. So there's my "Randy"-ish analysis. Only bugaboo right now is the typo.
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| James | Tuesday, 11. January 2011, 20:00 Post #3 |
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Oh, ouch, typing fail. *edits* Thankies. ![]() And thankies again. :DD |
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| Harket | Wednesday, 12. January 2011, 10:56 Post #4 |
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YAYY NO C&C CAUSE IM USELESS. ;D love this all the same
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| mousely | Wednesday, 12. January 2011, 23:08 Post #5 |
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Lose.
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Still love it. It's amazing.
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| James | Wednesday, 12. January 2011, 23:23 Post #6 |
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Thank you, Bunnies.
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