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| Warrior Poet | Tuesday, 25. January 2011, 16:17 Post #1 |
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So this is just a little thing I wrote. This world I've created deals with mind-uploading and there are a thousand directions I could go with it, a thousand issues I could deal with. I'm planning on this just being a short story since i need to work on A Forlorn Throne and I have other ideas too, but I just wanted to write something fun. I've written a first chapter/character sketch type thing to introduce myself to the world, half of which I just pulled out of my butt. Anyway, do you guys think this is worth continuing? I know it'll probably be confusing, especially if you're not a nerd, but tell me what you think. So I tried putting it in the post, but all the tabs got replaced with ASDF and euro symbol, and I don't feel like fixing it Oh well. It's not long, but I guess you'll have to deal with a PDF.
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| Jessie | Wednesday, 26. January 2011, 03:45 Post #2 |
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This was a very interesting read. Reminiscent of Flatland. If you posted more, I would definitely read it, because it's all like gritty and indie and out-there and om nom nom.I'll hold my more thorough critique until after you've smoothed out some of the wrinkles yourself. |
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| mousely | Wednesday, 26. January 2011, 04:01 Post #3 |
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I must say, that was quite interesting to read. xDD I love your creativity.
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| Warrior Poet | Wednesday, 26. January 2011, 04:59 Post #4 |
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Lol you both said the exact same thing to start off with. Thanks guys! Now that you mention it, it is a little like Flatland so far. I think all wannabe philosophers have heard of that, lol ![]()
This might be the highest praise you've ever given me. Indie wasn't what I would've thought of to describe it but you're absolutely right. Main reason I decided to write this was because it would be fun. You know me, almost everything I write is really heavy and/or heady and it's usually consistent and makes sense and all that. I just decided to do something weird so I'm glad it is
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| mousely | Thursday, 27. January 2011, 03:35 Post #5 |
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Ooh sorry. I didn't notice. But it really liked that. You should add more to it.
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| Warrior Poet | Thursday, 27. January 2011, 03:46 Post #6 |
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I think I will :0 |
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Oh well. It's not long, but I guess you'll have to deal with a PDF.
logic_preview.pdf (54.98 KB)



Reminiscent of Flatland. If you posted more, I would definitely read it, because it's all like gritty and indie and out-there and om nom nom.

2:12 PM Jul 11