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| James | Thursday, 3. February 2011, 18:05 Post #1 |
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it's all cool
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Edited by James, Saturday, 3. February 2018, 04:21.
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| mousely | Thursday, 3. February 2011, 18:09 Post #2 |
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That was weird...I'm not good at criticizing so I'll just say I liked it and run away.. |
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| Jessie | Thursday, 3. February 2011, 18:38 Post #3 |
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Hippohypocamputhalamus
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Brilliant brilliant brilliant. Holy crap. Where did that even COME from? o.o *joins Pudgers* |
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| Warrior Poet | Friday, 4. February 2011, 05:01 Post #4 |
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If you lead me, I will go.
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The first stanza seemed to make sense within a love context, but it became clear this wasn't actually intended to make sense. But it's still pretty awesome. So still assuming this is about love, how does that make you feel powerful? I do agree that ridiculous romanticism can make the world look a little blurry. I have no idea how it can be both blurry and focused sharper. I can understand the other person's laugh sounding shiny - now this reminds me more of the Joker and Batman than Romeo and Juliet. Eheheh. I'm sure this wasn't about Batman, but now that I look at it that way it's hilarious. I have absolutely no idea what this is about now. Explain it? XD it's great but I don't totally get it. For an even more dramatic effect, instead of using that dash, just stop in the middle of a thought. "And now I'll" and just leave it at that. that's even more annoying. Especially since that E is silent, "di-" doesn't mean much ![]() Well, anyway. Freaky, and strangely coherent to Batman |
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| James | Friday, 4. February 2011, 17:30 Post #5 |
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it's all cool
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lol Not a love poem. A drug addiction poem, more or less. ^-^ Relevence to Batman still stands?
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| Harket | Saturday, 5. February 2011, 06:34 Post #6 |
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Haha, i guessed drugs right off the bat. :} This poem was a little - weird? Well, I dont really understand how your voice can be shiny. I liked the night trust; whatever, and the monster in the mirror bit, but my ABSOLUTE FAV was the Fire bit. The ending struck me a little... queer, but it wasnt impactful enough. I know right, ME telling YOU this? Yea, right. But w'ver. It WAS, i guess, a good poem, but it wasnt one of my favs Sorry, but hey, it WAS still good.
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| James | Saturday, 5. February 2011, 19:25 Post #7 |
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Voices can be shiny. Trust me... You've never been heavily drugged, have you? Voices can be shiny.
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| mousely | Saturday, 5. February 2011, 19:28 Post #8 |
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Voices can SOOO be shiny. Owait I'm supposed to be hiding.
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A drug addiction poem, more or less. ^-^ Relevence to Batman still stands?

Sorry, but hey, it WAS still good. 
2:25 PM Jul 11