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| Warrior Poet | Thursday, 3. February 2011, 22:51 Post #1 |
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If you lead me, I will go.
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So the Snowpocalypse is going on and where I live, I probably have five times more than all of you, too :D. But I was watching the snowdrifts while I was walking home, and so there was a lot of fresh snow AND a lot of wind it was really serene, this nice thick sparkly dust playing across the gently curving crystal ground, and all that. I thank God for that beauty, and the friend this is for. She's dear to me. Wrote this down ![]() I now have some semblance of a band, and I hope we can put it to music. I have a melody in mind, hopefully it comes out. ------------------------------ Rest Your Eyes, Pretty Girl Snow drifts, silent, caress the gradual curves Patience sparkles as finally restlessness becomes That slow-breathing warmth of a bright winter day You needn't sew yourself together For today we wait to smell the earth Feel its touch and plant our dreams, for now For while we wait to smell the earth, it's cold A heart only blossoms in a season of warmth Hold out hope, I know, that as constant as the spring Turns to lift the frost, you will find love How it hurts to watch you looking -- Must you wander Break such fragile beauty Your footprints mar the curve Of an endless rolling earth -- Rest your eyes Pretty girl Dare to sink into the snow It's just one more day Just one more season And the white will keep you warm Realize that the ice holds beauty The cool might heal your fear It storms through the night, with each new sun You dig up your heart once more Realize that the world holds beauty Realize that the world holds love Not just in your heart but in every star Each far-off adventure and desolate world The sky is too vast for your gaze Reflections of light will glance off the surface -- Like glass and like water The sunset burns your eyes And still you're searching Oh, like all other wanderers You know that life inside was once your own Why do you give your love to the lost? There are endless snowflakes From the great clouds Maybe two were born the same – Must you break such fragile beauty – Rest your eyes Pretty girl Have faith in knowing Rain brings growing Leave this quest behind Rest your eyes Pretty girl Edited by Warrior Poet, Thursday, 3. February 2011, 22:51.
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| James | Friday, 4. February 2011, 03:58 Post #2 |
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it's all cool
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This is nice, very pretty. Some of the ideas in them have been done often, but it's nicely presented here, in a unique way. The general language helps to set the tone. Honestly, it sounds dated, but timeless.
Reading through, I saw this as the general theme? It didn't stick out the most, but it just seemed to sum everything up nicely. This is really just a curiosity but:
Is it saying: "There are endless snowflakes from the great clouds. Maybe two were born the same." or "There are endless snowflakes. From the great clouds, maybe two were born the same." or is it one of those take it as you will phrases? Your personification is fluent, metaphors constant... Another thing that I don't understand after the second break, first stanza, last line-- how can the white, which I'm taking as snow, keep one warm? I'm probably thinking too literally, but it doesn't make sense to me. Good work, I like this one. If you do turn this into a song, I'd love to hear it. Will it be metal or not?(Also, I'd love to have all the snow instead all of this ice.) |
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Will it be metal or not?
2:29 PM Jul 11