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Pouring Tears; A Haiku Poem about rain
Topic Started: Thursday, 3. February 2011, 23:11 (106 Views)
Swift
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I wrote this in school: Its not the best xD

Rain cries down to Earth
The thunder screamed from clouds.
Like a sad person.
Adjust. xD
Edited by Sfadow, Saturday, 5. February 2011, 12:00.
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Haha you kidding? It's hilarious. I expected you to develop the metaphor profoundly in the last line, where this is one of the cases where "like a sad person" is actually really effective. Hah, I love it.
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I metaphors-- not my thing.
Similies, yayyy..
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This is a good Haiku, the worst thing about it is the typo in the title.
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i know x.x
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Wanna know something really weird? If this wasnt a haiku, and if you minused the xD and made it

Rain cries down to Earth
The thunder screamed from clouds.
Like a sad person.
Adjust.

The, um, rhythm? Is something that is kind of awesome. I dunno, i like it. Hahaha. Anyway. I really, honestly, quite enjoyed this. My favourite line was the second - "thunder screamed from clouds". That was a pretty amazing line. :P
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thanks :]

And "Adjust" wasn't really part of the poem, I just put it there xDD
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