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| Swift | Thursday, 3. February 2011, 23:11 Post #1 |
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I wrote this in school: Its not the best ![]() Rain cries down to Earth The thunder screamed from clouds. Like a sad person. Adjust.
Edited by Sfadow, Saturday, 5. February 2011, 12:00.
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| Warrior Poet | Thursday, 3. February 2011, 23:28 Post #2 |
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Haha you kidding? It's hilarious. I expected you to develop the metaphor profoundly in the last line, where this is one of the cases where "like a sad person" is actually really effective. Hah, I love it. |
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| Swift | Thursday, 3. February 2011, 23:31 Post #3 |
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I metaphors-- not my thing. Similies, yayyy.. And thanks. |
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| Dissonant | Friday, 4. February 2011, 20:24 Post #4 |
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This is a good Haiku, the worst thing about it is the typo in the title. |
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| Swift | Friday, 4. February 2011, 21:38 Post #5 |
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i know x.x |
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| Harket | Saturday, 5. February 2011, 05:35 Post #6 |
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Wanna know something really weird? If this wasnt a haiku, and if you minused the and made it Rain cries down to Earth The thunder screamed from clouds. Like a sad person. Adjust. The, um, rhythm? Is something that is kind of awesome. I dunno, i like it. Hahaha. Anyway. I really, honestly, quite enjoyed this. My favourite line was the second - "thunder screamed from clouds". That was a pretty amazing line.
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| Swift | Saturday, 5. February 2011, 19:24 Post #7 |
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thanks :] And "Adjust" wasn't really part of the poem, I just put it there xDD |
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