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Trick of the Light
Topic Started: Tuesday, 8. February 2011, 02:49 (63 Views)
Jessie
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Trick of the Light

Is it just a trick of the
Light
Or am I in the middle of a firefight that
Values the smell of any smoldering spirit.
Every day I see how a piece of me is stuck in
You and I won't ever get it back.
Over and over I pull on the rope
Until my hands are burning.

Stuck forever like glue to you
Or at least like a magnet.
Righteousness is not human.
Righteousness is not me.
You get it don't you?
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2012 Poem of the Year - 2011 Best Poet
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mousely
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Lose.
I like the glue and magnets thing. :) Oh and the rope thing. Really good job. :D
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Warrior Poet
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If you lead me, I will go.
This sounds like a Crosshatch-type thing to me. It's pretty weird. But I did instantly get what the poem is about (sorry to hear you've been treated that way). Before I got it, I thought "trick of the light" was just another random metaphor, but when I look at it in context it's actually bitterly clever, which I appreciate.

Well, nice job. And PM/FB me if you wanna talk about that.
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