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| Tweet Topic Started: Tuesday, 8. February 2011, 02:49 (63 Views) | |
| Jessie | Tuesday, 8. February 2011, 02:49 Post #1 |
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Trick of the Light Is it just a trick of the Light Or am I in the middle of a firefight that Values the smell of any smoldering spirit. Every day I see how a piece of me is stuck in You and I won't ever get it back. Over and over I pull on the rope Until my hands are burning. Stuck forever like glue to you Or at least like a magnet. Righteousness is not human. Righteousness is not me. You get it don't you? |
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| mousely | Tuesday, 8. February 2011, 02:52 Post #2 |
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Lose.
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I like the glue and magnets thing. Oh and the rope thing. Really good job.
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| Warrior Poet | Tuesday, 8. February 2011, 03:46 Post #3 |
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If you lead me, I will go.
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This sounds like a Crosshatch-type thing to me. It's pretty weird. But I did instantly get what the poem is about (sorry to hear you've been treated that way). Before I got it, I thought "trick of the light" was just another random metaphor, but when I look at it in context it's actually bitterly clever, which I appreciate. Well, nice job. And PM/FB me if you wanna talk about that. |
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Oh and the rope thing. Really good job.
2:25 PM Jul 11