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| Harket | Tuesday, 15. February 2011, 15:13 Post #1 |
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What do you do- When the world turns against you, When the monster wants to kill? What do you do- When there's no one left to turn to, And stumble and fall you will? Why won't you cry- When your kinsmen pin you down, When those closest to you betray you? Why won't you die- When the poison has tried, Has choked you, left your insides dried? Girl, stop your running, You know there's no escape. Wherever you go, we'll find you, The story will play out again. Girl, stop your laughing, Strangled cry upon strangled cry, If your life is but a fairytale, What can we do, how can we try? There's no use escaping the truth, When the same surrounds you. You thought you were safe - Well, you were wrong! Girl, what a surprise. There's no use in escaping the truth. When your path is inlaid with gold, That'll lead you straight back Where you were found - Girl, what a surprise. Girl, stop your running, You know the world closes in. Tainted breaths upon painted wreaths, A cage holds only what's within. Girl, stop your laughing, Frantic clawing at your throat, High hysterical shrieks, We've warned you on this note. There's no use escaping the truth, If horrors and hells await. You've seen it all around you, Why did you doubt it too? There's no escaping the truth If the truth is what'll return. And I stand, with my blood stained hands, What a surprise, Girl, What a surprise. Copyright Sweetdang 2011 Hrumph.
Edited by Harket, Sunday, 9. October 2011, 09:33.
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| James | Tuesday, 15. February 2011, 15:32 Post #2 |
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it's all cool
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... o.o I feel unsfae! *highfive* Good work. |
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| Cow! | Thursday, 17. February 2011, 03:06 Post #3 |
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Ily and your emu pomes <3 If you redraft it, I'd suggest you either shorten the beginning bit or spread it out through the rest of the stanzas- it's a little long to serve as a proper intro. But that's not very important, and it's really the only quibble I have. gj gj
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