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| chihuahua0 | Monday, 19. July 2010, 17:54 Post #1 |
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This is one of my unfinished stories called "Second Adam". Please be warned that abortion and infetility is mentioned in this story. Please comment and hope that I finish this one day: Second Adam “It’s a boy!” “Preposterous! There must be something broken with the ultrasound.” “I got it fixed last week.” “It must be old then.” “Heresy,” Clara muttered under her breath. The old matron was with Erica and Naomi, circling around Eve. Eve was breathing rapidly, gripping her inflated tummy. Her pregnancy was seven months in, and it was her first. She looked at the black screen displaying the ultrasound of her baby. It matched the pictures of a male. “My baby’s a boy?” Eve meekly asked, looking at Clara. She was laying down, her waist strapped into the white cloth table. “Apparently, I’m afraid.” Clara was a member of the Aristocrats Council. She was fifty years old, and her winkles were prominent. Her head was long and gaunt. Her gray hair was tied in a perfect bun, and she wore a long red dress of the aristocrats. It was divided by one of the sides, but she wore black silky pants underneath, “This is quite dire indeed,” she continued. Erica, a nurse, interjected, “This is ungodly, a threat to our society!” She was a middle-aged plump woman with a beauty mark on her chin. She wore a dress with a similar form to Clara’s, but it was white and light-blue. Naomi interrupted with her soft-spoken voice, “Maybe this is a sign,” she was in her late 20’s and had dark brown hair, just like Eve. “Nonsense!” Clara bit, “Blastemy! Ms. Narazsa!” she pointed at Eve, “How do you perform such a trick?” “I-i-i. This isn’t a trick! This is my baby! My first baby!” “And maybe your last, Eve Narazsa! If this is real and you had the first male in three hundred years, you could have doomed us all! Remember, men were the ones that almost ended the world!” For a long time, there was silence in the vast, black room. It was one of the courtrooms were criminals were put up to trial. Since Eve’s crime technically didn’t break any felonies (being pregnant with a boy was the unthinkable), only Clara was there to prosecute. The sound of the monitor echoed. It made a bleeping thumping sound, like a heart. “Mother Clara?” Eve asked eventually, using the proper honorific. “This is…”the aristocrat whispered to herself quietly, “We have no choice, but to abort this boy.” “No!,” the pregnant woman reached out with her hand. “What?” Naomi attempted to defend her, “But it been years since we carried out an abortion.” “Don’t hurt my baby!” “There is no choice.” Clara stomp her foot, “Nurse Erica, are you willing to do it?” The nurse hesitated with her mouth open, “My skills are rusty, but I had personally aborted a baby many times.” “Please, Mother Clara,” Eve was looking at Clara, sobbing, “It isn’t his fault! He didn’t ask to be the first boy in centauries! Why kill an innocent person who hadn’t even had his first breath?” “Do you know the concept of abortion?” Nurse Erica warned, “A baby still in the womb doesn’t have a soul. “Only by theory!” her tears came down faster, “Besides, my baby is ready in a month or two!” There was almost no noise again, besides the steady blipping of the monitor and the Eve’s deep sobs. The boy tumbled in her womb, but then stopped. Clara pondered the situation, “I could make an exception” she thought, “Ms. Narazsa, we don’t want to risk killing you. You are a valuable asset to New Angeles.” “I-I don’t care! I just want my baby boy spared,” she was calming down, but she was still struggling to speak. “But there is a chance that we might be able to fix him; applying the same methods we use to implant unsexuals.” “Make him a girl? But you-“ Eve stopped because her throat was hoarse from speaking. “It’s the only way, Ms. Narazsa. We can’t have a boy. The other societies would attack us for supporting the Old Ways.” Naomi looked at Eve with her shocked eyes. The junior nurse related to her, since she was infertile. The in-ability to have a child in society was shameful, and losing a child and losing the ability to procreate was equally sad. But then Naomi remembered the Neo-Testament. “Excuse me, Mother Clara, but what about New Revelations?” “New Revelations?” Clara faced Naomi fiercely. She lost her temper, “How could-“she pointed at the ultrasound, “this boy be Our Savior? He’s a boy, for god’s sake!” “But it says nothing about Our Savior being a female. As quoted:’ Our Savior will be born rejected from society. But, Our Savior will be The Great Prophet, The Third Messiah, and most of all, The Second Adam.” “That is just a crude translation!” The original text was written in Old Latin, by Gerard Deckard, an American.” “I’m afraid not, Clara Enoch.” Suddenly, from the front of the room, the broadcast screen flickered on. All four of the women looked at it as it turned on and gave bright light into the room. The beautiful image of Mariana appeared, her head in front of a white background. Mariana was the youngest and most beautiful council member in New Angeles history. She had black short cropped hair and her skin was a pleasant tan. She had medium lips but long eyelashes that went with her amber red eyes. On her neck was a necklace with a diamond-embelled metal cross. She wore pure white, representing ultimate authority and ultimate good. Even from the screen, her bright aura radiated, putting all of them into a calm state. “As said in the Neo-Scriptures” Mariana said, “‘Our Savior will be the Third Messiah, and will reunite all Earth societies and establish one nation around the world’. And also, ‘Our Savior will be the Second Messiah’s or Samantha Christian’s, descent. The Narazsa family are the most directly related to her.” “But what about Our Savior being a boy?” Clara Enoch was still stubborn. “Remember Tamaton 6:12 ‘Our Savior will be the only one of his kind.’ Interpreters previously believe it was ‘the last’, not ‘the only one’. This was recently proven wrong by the Readers.” Silence filled the room for a third time. “Mariana continued, “Eve of Narazsa, I rechristined you as the New Virgin Mary. May you keep your baby, the Presumed Third Messiah. As long as he remains pure and survives to adulthood, may he fulfill New Revelations and be the True Our Savior.” Then the screen flickered off, leaving Clara, Erica, Naomi, and Eve starting at it. Then they avert their eyes at the ultra-sound, where it showed the male unborn baby wiggling in the womb. Eve closed her eyes. She felt a sensation; the sensation of praying. She felt like she finally discovered what is really is, and what she is will change the world. She knew she was the New Virgin Mary, and was allotted the task of raising Our Savior to adulthood. Clara sighed, “What Grand Council Member Mariana degrees is law. I alone don’t have the authority to overwrite it, and the Aristocrats Council will be divided on this. Therefore, you may keep your child, Eve Narazsa. But, on one condition: This must be kept secret. It will be degreed that your baby is a boy, but is a test to see if mankind can be as pure as womankind. This will create many challenges for you, but I know you care more for your baby than your own wellbeing.” “Thank you, Mother Clara.” Eve finally opened her eyes, and put her hands together in prayer, “Thank you God, for I am grateful. I am grateful that you gave me Our Savior and put it in my care. I will accept my role as the New Virgin Mary, pure hearted and destined at birth. “I christen Our Savior as Adam Abraham Narazsa, in honor of the first man and the Father of Israel. So help me God. Amen.” This is copyrighted under Writing.com. |
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| Warrior Poet | Tuesday, 20. July 2010, 00:33 Post #2 |
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huh. this is certainly interesting. I can't wait to see more. You seem to know enough about the Bible to know that in Revelation, at the end, Jesus warns that if anything is ever added to, taken away from, or changed in God's word, whoever did it will be severely punished. But I wonder what happened to the world - why are there only women, how does she get pregnant with a dude if there's no Y chromosomes left, who the heck messed with the Bible and had nobody at all notice? Wow. I can't wait to read more. |
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