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| Poke Rangers: Naton- Seasons 1 and possibly 2; My spin-off | |
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| Topic Started: Nov 5 2007, 08:42 PM (274 Views) | |
| Yankee Blaze | Nov 5 2007, 08:42 PM Post #1 |
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I am writing Chapter 4 of Biomic Soldiers. So, um... let's see. I decided to cut part of Chapter 3 of the series by accident, luckily for me I can re-edit the chapter to put it back in. Who thinks of the series so far? I am not putting a poll up yet until I get at least 10 chapters into the series. |
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| Yankee Blaze | Nov 12 2007, 04:27 PM Post #2 |
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My episode list for now: 1. The Resurrection of the Biomic Megazord 2. Warriors of Destiny 3. Computer Breakdown 4. Invisible Enemy 5. Fight For Your Soul 6. Pollution Kills 7. Kleeton's Captured Part 1 8. Kleeton's Captured Part 2 9. Ivan Erased 10. A Sacrifice to Make Part 1 11. A Sacrifice to Make Part 2 12. Blackout 13. What Should I Do? 14. My Name is... Wall-E 15. Two Girls Is Enough! (Katie/Lucy Storyline) 16. 21599 Seconds To Go! 17. Dragon Terror 18. Griffith, You Are On The List 19. The Black Prince Part 1 20. The Black Prince Part 2 21. Lucy's Trance Leads to Destruction 22. Ivan The Terrible 23. Tear Drops of Love 24. Larry, I Set Your Crops on Fire 25. He's Your Father Part 1 26. He's Your Father Part 2 27. Spidertron Attack! 28. The Day the Surfer's Cafe Disappeared 29. Kill the Doctor Himself 30. 31. Behold, the Mecha Megas 32. Holy Matrimony 33. 34. Behold, the Power of Biomic Soldiers! 35. Falling In Love With Katie Part 1 36. Falling In Love With Katie Part 2 37. The Biomic Assassin 38. Legend of the Ultimate Mecha 39. Draco's Trap 40. Grand Theft Auto 41. 42. 43. 44. 45. 46. The Football Scheme 47. Father Part 1 48. Father Part 2 49. Critical Times 50. Assault, Neo Base Part 1 51. Assault, Neo Base Part 2 Edited by Yankee Blaze, Jun 28 2008, 04:55 PM.
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| Femore | Dec 17 2007, 06:00 AM Post #3 |
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Yankee, I don't mean to be mean but this fic is hard to follow. I know a few of my reviews for this have been harsh and for that I'm sorry but to use a familiar phrase, "This isn't your first dance.". Granted, I've never seen Super Sentai and I'm not disputing your opinion about it. You need to lean more towards Power Rangers which is what I thought was the idea of Poke Rangers to begin with. Granted, ever since Zyuranger was made into Mighty Morphin Power Rangers this is a small point. Probably, the people working on Power Rangers try to make the American version try to make their version better. |
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| Psyduck Ranger | Dec 17 2007, 08:36 AM Post #4 |
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I'm afraid I have to gree with Femore here. The sorts of things the characters say are not things that people with proper understanding of the English language (especially those who have English as a first language!) would say. At times reading I actually sopmetimes wonder if English is even your first language, Yankee. That's how bad it can get. Next thing you know we'll have AYBABTU cropping up... |
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| Yankee Blaze | Dec 17 2007, 01:33 PM Post #5 |
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Well, I'll try... I don't know for how long though. |
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| Yankee Blaze | Dec 17 2007, 02:00 PM Post #6 |
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I think I know what I forgot to put in! I never used it... I never thought of a place where they could hang out. Oh, and Femore. Thanks for the Mecha Giants. |
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| Psyduck Ranger | Dec 17 2007, 06:02 PM Post #7 |
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Yes, but a hang out wouldn't affect the way it's written...and besides, plenty of Power Rangers series didn't have a specific hangout. Like LG, or - well, any of the proceeding series up to DT (I don't count their bases as hangout places). |
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| Yankee Blaze | Dec 18 2007, 03:48 AM Post #8 |
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Okay? What other things do I need to improve on for this? Because I am going to rewrite Chapter 6 and start it over from scratch. Oh, and English was and still is my first language. I have a long history which is kept personal of how many critical mistakes I can make and never realize it. |
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| Psyduck Ranger | Dec 18 2007, 07:37 AM Post #9 |
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Well you could also use work on character...things like Dr. Darkness's motives, for a start...also, work on names... I mean "Dr. Darkness"? "Badlands City"? They don't sound like you gave them a moments thought... Of course I think this is all stuff I've moaned about before... |
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| Yankee Blaze | Dec 18 2007, 01:57 PM Post #10 |
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Okay, I changed the city names: Angel City- City of peace and tranquility. Known for love and care. Dark City- Was Badland City. The town of criminals. Known for robbing banks on weekends. Grangerville City- A village known for peaceful things. Farmers usually reside here as they harvest their own crops. Money Town- The city of money! Gambling and Luck Angelic Power Plant- A plant located up in the mountains that controls Naton’s electric supply in the east. Often abandoned Dr. Von Ulf- Was Dr. Darkness- named after a Vampire. I might as well put up the arsenal on the forum... Did I forget that I increased my episode guide. |
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| Psyduck Ranger | Dec 18 2007, 05:31 PM Post #11 |
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Von Ulf is certainly a better name, although it leaves me wondering if the vampiric origin of the name might come up again. Still, things like Dark City and Money Town... |
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| Yankee Blaze | Dec 20 2007, 01:32 PM Post #12 |
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Well, let's see Green City- was Money Town. The city of gambling |
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| Femore | Jan 2 2008, 05:39 AM Post #13 |
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I know this might sound like a dumb idea but hear me out. Instead of calling this Poke Rangers, maybe you should stick with thinking Japanese. Like Pokemon in Japan is called Pocket Monsters and Power Rangers is Super Sentai, how about Pocket Sentai? Doing that would let you stay with the same way you have been writing this fic. |
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| Psyduck Ranger | Jan 2 2008, 09:58 AM Post #14 |
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Interesting idea...though wouldn't that make it AU with Poké Rangers, like Sentai and Power Rangers are in different universes? Although I suppose that would mean anything could be put in and it wouldn't be contradictory to anything... |
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| Yankee Blaze | Jan 2 2008, 02:22 PM Post #15 |
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Probably... Hey, Pocket Sentai.... hmm. I'll think of that. |
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