| Welcome to The Gang of Five | The Land Before Time. We hope you enjoy your visit. You're currently viewing our forum as a guest. This means you are limited to certain areas of the board and there are some features you can't use. If you join our community, you'll be able to access member-only sections, and use many member-only features such as customizing your profile, sending personal messages, and voting in polls. Registration is simple, fast, and completely free. Join our community! If you're already a member please log in to your account to access all of our features: |
| Frozen Meatsack; A poem about my current "life..." | |
|---|---|
| Tweet Topic Started: May 21 2008, 05:23:16 PM (384 Views) | |
| NeptuneNavigator2001 | May 21 2008, 05:23:16 PM Post #1 |
![]()
Goodnight Everybody!
|
Ehh... I'm down in the dumps again, kinda... So, here's another one from me, about my current situation... Started today, and finished it... Frozen Meatsack Twilighted day, covered in Gray, as the coffee grows Cold and runs dry. Sipping Away, staring into space, As the teardrops slowly Rise through the pain... Flowers in bloom, birds singing A song, can hardly break Through the lonely feeling Inside... BROKEN! CRUSHED! DESTROYED! The dreams that he'd held, Since he was a boy...! Taken Away, like a thief in the Night, without the knowledge To put up a fight, abysmal Shattering, illusion gathering, Jagged glass frozen in Time... Gathering of fragments, and cutting Of hands, the trail stained with Red... Painting the icy Boulevard, with a crimson Brush, of jaggedly-hanging Flesh... The pain is all Too real, exposed to the Bone... Simply refusing to let Go... What have I done? Where Did I go wrong? Do I Carry a torch, do I Sing this song? Or carry My stake as this nightmare Goes on, and follow the King, With a smile painted on...? Do I cry, do I scream, do I Pick up the dream?! Do I Mope around the house, or Blow off some steam...? Clutching at my broken dreams... Jagged pieces, cutting through me... Looking at this moment in Time, the red-stained road, With cracks through the Line... My home blows up, And the debris, falls down, through The shaft of the mine... In the blistering cold, the Memories of long, cold... Time... Time... Time... Time...! The bells toll on, as I Wander the cold, clutching This mass of glass, growing Old... Walking alone, I carry My load, drawing a blank, As I travel this war-torn Road... ...There is probably a very HIGH chance that I will turn this poem into a song sometime soon. ...If only I could find the right notes... I mostly had them, though... So, maybe it won't be too hard to figure it out... |
![]() |
|
| Cancerian Tiger | May 22 2008, 03:39:06 AM Post #2 |
|
Look Within Yourself
|
Hmm...ya really have a talent for poetry, NeptuneNavigator2001 :yes. Best wishes to turning it into a song B). |
![]() |
|
| Mumbling | May 22 2008, 01:56:05 PM Post #3 |
![]()
Rawr.
![]()
|
You're talented, Aaron. I know how your situation is like... This made me cry..
|
![]() |
|
| NeptuneNavigator2001 | May 22 2008, 02:01:00 PM Post #4 |
![]()
Goodnight Everybody!
|
...Wow... I'm... Touched... ...Deeply, that anyone would even consider me, to have a talent, much less a gift... Thank you guys... ...I hope you don't cry too much about it, Iris... *hands you a hankie* It was mostly inspired by Pink Floyd's "The Final Cut" album, specifically, "The Post-War Dream," "Your Possible Pasts," the guitar solo to "The Fletcher Memorial Home," "The Hero's Return," and "The Final Cut." Perhaps, sub-consciously, it was also inspired by 12 Stones' "Home" song... |
![]() |
|
| Mumbling | May 22 2008, 02:03:59 PM Post #5 |
![]()
Rawr.
![]()
|
It's ok again.. I was just a bit.. Well.. I just felt too sorry for you.. |
![]() |
|
| NeptuneNavigator2001 | May 22 2008, 02:05:26 PM Post #6 |
![]()
Goodnight Everybody!
|
...I'm touched... Really, I am. Thank you... EDIT: You don't need to explain yourself... I understand, Iris... It's okay...! |
![]() |
|
| Rat_lady7 | Sep 29 2008, 11:36:41 PM Post #7 |
|
Littlefoot
|
Very beautiful Aaron. ![]() I like it a lot!
|
![]() |
|
| NeptuneNavigator2001 | Mar 28 2009, 02:26:12 AM Post #8 |
![]()
Goodnight Everybody!
|
Wow, is this a late response... I didn't realize you'd posted on my poem topic. Thanks, Rat_Lady7. ...Gawd, this is so late... xD
|
![]() |
|
| 1 user reading this topic (1 Guest and 0 Anonymous) | |
| « Previous Topic · The Written Word · Next Topic » |










8:03 PM Jul 10