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| rhombus | Apr 9 2017, 12:55:02 AM Post #221 |
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The Friendly Parallelogram
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My apologizes for not seeing this until now. These two chapters were very welcome additions to the story that clarify a bit of Littlefoot and Ali's thinking. Though the love triangle possibility is off of the books, I can't help but think that things with Cho are still going to be quite a bit complicated. Littlefoot can be quite the unintentional heart-breaker. Now the addition of Lizzie with Pat is a very interesting one. Lizzie seems to have a deep silence and foreboding to her, which can be indicative of a hard life, which was all but confirmed in what we are hinted about with her past. Though I almost wonder if there isn't something else about her. She almost has some autism like symptoms in certain ways, though I am probably reading too far into it. In any case, a most interesting addition. My apologizes once again for missing these chapters when they were originally posted. I look forward to seeing how all of these plot points develop in the installments ahead. |
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| Ducky123 | Apr 9 2017, 12:48:31 PM Post #222 |
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Lizzie (I'm not the most creative person when it comes to names ) remains a mystery for now but, as you should know by know, information will come piece by piece until, eventually, Lizzie won't be as mysterious anymore, uhh I guess She's definnitely going to have a role to play, that much is certain ![]()
Problems with the italics? I didn't see any when I took a quick look at it before posting, can you point them out? Also, I was using additional ' xxx ' to indicate inner dialogue (which usually gets the italics). Maybe it is that? Anyway, I'm glad you liked those scenes Cho's and Ali's scene was the reason for my writer's block though, ugh ![]()
Thanks a lot ![]() It seems so for the moment. the next chapter is a bit tough because it's a bit of an inbetweener but once I get past that chapter, I should have a pretty good idea what to write next for these chapters ![]() *
It's been 3 days, that's not much. I'm lagging behand 1-2 months with reading
You should know Cho by now... she IS complicated Glad you liked the additions!
Funny that you mention autism... I tried to give Cho that impression of autistic behaviorisms As for Lizzie, you will get to know more about her soon. So much confirmation for now: Yes, she has had a hard life... stay tuned for the details, I'm sure you'll be... surprised ![]() Also, I have another question: Did anyone notice something in that Ali/Cho scene? One of my readers had a pretty... interesting theory about the two to say the least. I'm just curious if anybody else noticed something
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| Sovereign | Apr 9 2017, 03:31:49 PM Post #223 |
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I'm sorry if I'm being nitpicky but the scene I meant is this one.
There's this extra italic sign and I thought the italic sequence ended rather oddly. However, it's nothing serious.
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| Ducky123 | Apr 25 2017, 05:02:58 PM Post #224 |
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Should be fixed by now, thanks ![]() No new chapter (yet though it's close to being finished) but I'd just like to share a very special comment with you that somebody on ff.net made a while ago. Found it to be very uplifting and really gave me that kick that helped me to defeat writer's block ![]() Here you go:
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) remains a mystery for now but, as you should know by know, information will come piece by piece until, eventually, Lizzie won't be as mysterious anymore, uhh I guess 
Cho's and Ali's scene was the reason for my writer's block though, ugh 
9:35 AM Jul 11